I don’t know whether you came to Denizli or not.If you don’t come , I recommend you to come here. Denizli which locates west of Turkey isn’t a very big city. Generally, Denizli is famous for its cocks that crow long time, and it is known as a textile city. In addition, Denizli has many charming places and thingh that become integrated to Denizli.
One of the charming places is ”Pamukkale”. There ara travertines whose colors are snow-white. They look so glorious that when people saw them once, they coulnd’t forget their apperance. Pamukkale has hot water which heals many diseases such as rheumatism, skin diseases. There is special mud that is known as healing. Although it is beneficial, it smells very bad. In Pamukkale, there are many chic hotels to put you up. They are so comfortable that you feel yourselves as e queen or king. Windows of these hotels open amazing beauty of Pamukkale.Another lovely place is “Çamlık”. It is well known in Denizli. When you go there, you breathe fresh air and see a lot of tall trees which facilitate people to have a picnic especially in hot summer days. Everywhere is gren. There are tables that are made from wood. If you want, you can climb big Çamlık Mountain.I must tell about “İncilipınar Park”. People say it is the biggest park of Aegean Region. It’s so charming. It has a lake which is artificial. In the lake there are white and cute ducks. While people have a chat as sitting on benchets , ducks sound very pretty. Especially in nights, its illumination is attractive.Lake’s harmony with light deserves to be seen.As I said before, cocks are symbol of Denizli. In addition, Denizli is famous for dust and women. Generally in autumn, your eyes can turn red. Sometimes, you can’t walk because of wing and dust. Actually, Denizli’s women are beautiful. They have attractiveness. They are really pretty women. With their speech, behaviours, looks ad positions, they arouse your interst.
To sum up, Denizli is a very enjoyable city with its places, hospitable people who have very sweet accent, and nice habits. I advise you to came here. If you come, you won’t regret. Denizli is waiting you with the whole beauty.
hi my baby.thanks to you ı like denizli very much.your essay describes denizli very well. ı think using adjective and adverb is enough.
ReplyDeleteI lıved your descrıptıve esaay too. but there are vocabuları mistakes.but not much.your descrıptıves are good.you'r OK :)
ReplyDeleteYour essay sounds good and descirbes the city to seom extent but I believe that it can still be improved in many respects such as grammar, syntax, spelling and word choice. If you read the essay again, you can spot these weaknesses.
ReplyDeleteHi Özge,
ReplyDeleteYour description is so effective that l like while reading..Some small mistakes should be corrected.For example, " in nights"=>it should be "at nights" l think."I advise you to came here."=>in this sentence you should use "come". If l say wrong l will apologize but if you correct it will be better for us..see you later lovely girl:)
Dear Özge,
ReplyDeleteyour introduction has a mistake you said that Denizli locates.. but it should be Denizli was located...also it has a mistake as sonay said before,but generally it is good..))thanks for writing..
after ı read my essay again, ı realized some mistakes, too. Thank you for your comments:):)
ReplyDeleteI don’t know whether you came to Denizli or not.If you don’t come , I recommend you to come here. Denizli which locates west of Turkey isn’t a very big city. Generally, Denizli is famous for its cocks that crow long time, and it is known as a textile city. In addition, Denizli has many charming places and thingh that become integrated to Denizli.
ReplyDeleteDear Ozge,
You tried your best to desscribe your beautiful hometown Denizli. The essay contains a number of spelling, grammar, and sentence errors indicated in / /. You can also come up with more effective description of different places.
"One of the charming places is ”Pamukkale”. There ara travertines whose colors are snow-white. They look so glorious that when people saw/see/ them once, they coulnd’t/cannot/ forget their apperance. Pamukkale has hot water which heals many diseases such as rheumatism, skin diseases. There is special mud that is known as healing. Although it is beneficial, it smells very bad. In Pamukkale, there are many chic hotels to put you up. They are so comfortable that you feel yourselves as e/a/ queen or king. Windows of these hotels open amazing beauty of Pamukkale.Another lovely place is “Çamlık”. It is well known in Denizli. When you go there, you breathe fresh air and see a lot of tall trees which facilitate people to have a picnic especially in hot summer days. Everywhere is gren. There are tables that are made from wood. If you want, you can climb big Çamlık Mountain.I must tell/incorrect word choice/ about “İncilipınar Park”. People say it is the biggest park of Aegean Region. It’s so charming. It has a lake which is artificial. In the lake there are white and cute ducks. While people have a chat as/incorrect/ sitting on benchets , ducks sound very pretty. Especially in nights, its illumination is attractive.Lake’s harmony with light deserves to be seen.As I said before, cocks are symbol of Denizli. In addition, Denizli is famous for dust and women. Generally in autumn, your eyes can turn red. Sometimes, you can’t walk because of wing and dust. Actually, Denizli’s women are beautiful. They have attractiveness/awkward description/. They are really pretty women. With their speech, behaviours, looks ad positions/unclear word choice/, they arouse your interst.
To sum up, Denizli is a very enjoyable city with its places, hospitable people who have very sweet accent, and nice habits. I advise you to came/come/ here. If you come, you won’t regret. Denizli is waiting you with the whole beauty.
I read your essay and couldn't see a lot of mistakes.some usage of adjectives may be problem... see you
ReplyDeleteI liked your essay Özge.After I read that essay I start to like Denizli.Apart from some grammatical errors like in night instead of this it should be at night.But it is not a big problem it escapes your eye İ think:)
ReplyDeletehi özge;
ReplyDeleteYour essay is very effective. I like it so much. but there are some grammatical mistakes but it is not a problem.all of us make some small mistakes:)))